Success Criteria: I know I can do this when I write my story in order and use capital letters and full stops correctly.
Last Saturday down by the river,I was fishing with my friend, Emma.There was a loud scream. A little girl was in the cold water. She was shouting out loud for help.My friend Emma and I ran towards her.We pulled her out with a long branch. We got her out and we put the branch away where it was.
Emily's mum said ,"thank you". and they all went home.Emily's mum said "you're not allowed to fish by yourself again unless I say so". Then they all went to bed and sleep.
interesting writing sweetheart. Keep up with your imagination i know its there and its big. I love it. mum
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